[inownsuipsy]

I am writing a persuasive essay for my English class and my topic is the myths and misconceptions surrounding Pit Bulls. I have an introduction typed and saved, but wanted to see what you all thought about it and was wondering if anyone has any suggestions for improvement. When I'm finished with the entire thing, I might post it on here, if anyone was interested. (:

"If you saw a “Pit Bull” being walked by its owner at your local park, how would you react? Would you cringe at the thought of the monstrous thing and stay out of its way, or would you be compelled to ask if you may pet this wonderful, misunderstood creature? The general public would probably be afraid of it. However, the properly educated portion of the human race knows better than to conform to popular belief and succumb to the mass hysteria regarding this breed without first doing research of their own. If you are one of these sheep being lead by the media that shudder at the thought or sight of a Pit Bull and consider them vicious atrocities, I have one question for you: Before you form an opinion or pass judgement about something, should you not know the facts surrounding it? Sheep, prepare to be enlightened."

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Also, my supporting evidence involves a very detailed breed history, various personal experiences, identifying the role the media plays in the fear associated with the breed, and studies done by the CDC, ATTS, and NCRC.