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**igs00r** · 03-24-2006, 07:00 AM

Problems I envisage....

a)The references to Saudi AND Pakistan in the statement together. I don't have the time to get into politics, but I fit the profile to a T, all I need is a beard and a backpack. That coupled with the time in cadets makes me out to be a well trained killing machine... Perhaps I'll just say 'our family went abroad' but that obviously takes out the exotic arabian flavour..

From my point of view, I won't see that as a problem. Obviously you need to emphasize on the positive points and keep the semi-negative points brief.

I reckon it would be better if you focus on the more recent experience in South Africa than your childhood Arabian life... Essentially they want people who are willing to help (like you did for aid work), and not just "I was there because my dad did adn he dragged me into it"

... In addition to the teaching experience part, don't you have something relevant to say in kendo? Such as organizing/ structuring/ managing/ planning the class/club with beginners, and not essentially a kids class... I am not sure if its just me who got the "oops he said he hasn't got any experience" impression on the first sentence, even though the later half of the paragraph works out fine (and make sense). But if in doubt you can always refer to those books about lesson plans and classroom management for teachers - avaliable for those going on teaching postgrad cert. (PGCE)..

- Note that I come across this as a reader, not someone who can really give any advice, especially in writing... and in english...

but I do enjoy reading it.

03-24-2006, 07:00 AM	#5
igs00r Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 601 Senior Member	Problems I envisage.... a)The references to Saudi AND Pakistan in the statement together. I don't have the time to get into politics, but I fit the profile to a T, all I need is a beard and a backpack. That coupled with the time in cadets makes me out to be a well trained killing machine... Perhaps I'll just say 'our family went abroad' but that obviously takes out the exotic arabian flavour.. From my point of view, I won't see that as a problem. Obviously you need to emphasize on the positive points and keep the semi-negative points brief. I reckon it would be better if you focus on the more recent experience in South Africa than your childhood Arabian life... Essentially they want people who are willing to help (like you did for aid work), and not just "I was there because my dad did adn he dragged me into it" ... In addition to the teaching experience part, don't you have something relevant to say in kendo? Such as organizing/ structuring/ managing/ planning the class/club with beginners, and not essentially a kids class... I am not sure if its just me who got the "oops he said he hasn't got any experience" impression on the first sentence, even though the later half of the paragraph works out fine (and make sense). But if in doubt you can always refer to those books about lesson plans and classroom management for teachers - avaliable for those going on teaching postgrad cert. (PGCE).. - Note that I come across this as a reader, not someone who can really give any advice, especially in writing... and in english... but I do enjoy reading it.
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