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ok, so I have a passion for poetry. I like to think im good, but that could just be my 'father' point of view. I'd like some input, good or bad on my poems if you guys could be so kind. Please, NO flaming. Negative input is welcomed, but none of this "your stuff is crap" business... thanks you

Red Rose

Shut up mother sucker your talking too long
Disease, you appease, that makes my Roses wrong
My kindness, the soil feeding all your freaking greeds
Talking down, making bleed, and bite that hand feeds
To think, I tired to soothe your insecurities
I guess, in all, you were nothing but a twisted tease
Leading me to a demise that everyone foretold
I didn't see, until it was to late, tell my soul was sold
Now your reflections in shards of all this broken glass
I see the blood on the thorns of Roses that I cast
You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude
When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed
Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses
Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes
Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red
Turn the color to a death black instead
What else did you expect on Valentines Day
Roses always die; they always decay
Now here I go, one more hopeful thinking time
I slept with the devil, now I drink his morbid wine
I'm drunk, in time, I'll chose not to remember
But the roses find life in the heat ember
I'll be damned if I'm gonna let insecurities
Weigh me down, and now to think, I let this reprise
One too many times, scars on my back, still I'm bleeding
Still I fight the war so deep inside me; still I'm feeding
Now I try to rebuild on a foundation of deprave
The only Rose I should've gave, is on a grave
You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude
When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed
Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses
Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes
Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red
Turn the color to a death black instead
What else did you expect on Valentines Day
Roses always die; they always decay
Pandora's Box

See that I don't get it!
I breathed your lies, and watched the eyes
My hands were tied, cant stop demise
So sick of your fessing, wish you'd stop messing
No snake hissing, my affections im expressing
I believed in evolution, not this execution
I tried to find a solution to this revolution
But what I found just made it worse
That's why I live this curse, nursed
In this verse!
I've have opened Pandora's Box
After all the walks... and all the talks
Now I've come to see that you're my enemy
Beware... I've gone insane
I will bleed you from my veins!!
Now there's no compromise
To what you've done, to what you said
Your still the voice inside my head
That voice that calls to me in the dead on night
The one that says its going to be alright.
but I now know that speech to be pseudo salvation
All you did was lead me into a sinful temptation
Now what I found just made it worse
That's why I live this curse, nursed
In this verse!
I've have opened Pandora's Box
After all the walks... and all the talks
Now I've come to see that you're my enemy
Beware... I've gone insane
I will bleed you from my veins!!
All this confusion... and this delusion
Has lead to me to one conclusion!
That you were never there for me
You were just there to see me bleed!
Upon looking back, now realize
That I'm the cause of my demise
I reached out my open hand
And you have taken me, to this land
Now I put up this middle finger
To show you, no romance lingers
I have opened up Pandora's Box
from my own flummox
Why couldn't you have seen
That I am what I seem
Ill add more if you guys so desire