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**NikitahDE** · 08-13-2010, 06:39 AM

ok, so I have a passion for poetry. I like to think im good, but that could just be my 'father' point of view. I'd like some input, good or bad on my poems if you guys could be so kind. Please, NO flaming. Negative input is welcomed, but none of this "your stuff is crap" business... thanks you

Red Rose

Shut up mother sucker your talking too long
Disease, you appease, that makes my Roses wrong
My kindness, the soil feeding all your freaking greeds
Talking down, making bleed, and bite that hand feeds
To think, I tired to soothe your insecurities
I guess, in all, you were nothing but a twisted tease
Leading me to a demise that everyone foretold
I didn't see, until it was to late, tell my soul was sold
Now your reflections in shards of all this broken glass
I see the blood on the thorns of Roses that I cast
You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude
When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed
Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses
Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes
Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red
Turn the color to a death black instead
What else did you expect on Valentines Day
Roses always die; they always decay
Now here I go, one more hopeful thinking time
I slept with the devil, now I drink his morbid wine
I'm drunk, in time, I'll chose not to remember
But the roses find life in the heat ember
I'll be damned if I'm gonna let insecurities
Weigh me down, and now to think, I let this reprise
One too many times, scars on my back, still I'm bleeding
Still I fight the war so deep inside me; still I'm feeding
Now I try to rebuild on a foundation of deprave
The only Rose I should've gave, is on a grave
You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude
When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed
Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses
Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes
Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red
Turn the color to a death black instead
What else did you expect on Valentines Day
Roses always die; they always decay
Pandora's Box

See that I don't get it!
I breathed your lies, and watched the eyes
My hands were tied, cant stop demise
So sick of your fessing, wish you'd stop messing
No snake hissing, my affections im expressing
I believed in evolution, not this execution
I tried to find a solution to this revolution
But what I found just made it worse
That's why I live this curse, nursed
In this verse!
I've have opened Pandora's Box
After all the walks... and all the talks
Now I've come to see that you're my enemy
Beware... I've gone insane
I will bleed you from my veins!!
Now there's no compromise
To what you've done, to what you said
Your still the voice inside my head
That voice that calls to me in the dead on night
The one that says its going to be alright.
but I now know that speech to be pseudo salvation
All you did was lead me into a sinful temptation
Now what I found just made it worse
That's why I live this curse, nursed
In this verse!
I've have opened Pandora's Box
After all the walks... and all the talks
Now I've come to see that you're my enemy
Beware... I've gone insane
I will bleed you from my veins!!
All this confusion... and this delusion
Has lead to me to one conclusion!
That you were never there for me
You were just there to see me bleed!
Upon looking back, now realize
That I'm the cause of my demise
I reached out my open hand
And you have taken me, to this land
Now I put up this middle finger
To show you, no romance lingers
I have opened up Pandora's Box
from my own flummox
Why couldn't you have seen
That I am what I seem
Ill add more if you guys so desire

**Maserati** · 08-13-2010, 06:41 AM

you suck

**XU8i6ysK** · 08-13-2010, 06:43 AM

Porch, no spamming. >:|

Also, Nexus, I read your stuff on DHQ, very good stuff man.

**Prererularl** · 08-13-2010, 06:45 AM

DHQ?? I thought I was the only person who went to that anceint place lol.

And thanks for the input

**ZZChristopher** · 08-13-2010, 06:46 AM

Nope lol, I'm Hisagi on there. XD

**emingeRek** · 08-13-2010, 08:14 AM

Haha, thats kewl bro

And thanks for the input. These ones are a little darker then the ones I posted on there, and a little older too lol

**ElectraDupu** · 08-13-2010, 04:01 PM

It's not horrible just a little to angry for my tastes.

**pKgGpUlF** · 08-13-2010, 10:04 PM

Well I write when im angry, so that where that voices comes from. Thanks though

08-13-2010, 06:39 AM	#1
NikitahDE Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 443 Senior Member	Some of my poems ok, so I have a passion for poetry. I like to think im good, but that could just be my 'father' point of view. I'd like some input, good or bad on my poems if you guys could be so kind. Please, NO flaming. Negative input is welcomed, but none of this "your stuff is crap" business... thanks you Red Rose Shut up mother sucker your talking too long Disease, you appease, that makes my Roses wrong My kindness, the soil feeding all your freaking greeds Talking down, making bleed, and bite that hand feeds To think, I tired to soothe your insecurities I guess, in all, you were nothing but a twisted tease Leading me to a demise that everyone foretold I didn't see, until it was to late, tell my soul was sold Now your reflections in shards of all this broken glass I see the blood on the thorns of Roses that I cast You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red Turn the color to a death black instead What else did you expect on Valentines Day Roses always die; they always decay Now here I go, one more hopeful thinking time I slept with the devil, now I drink his morbid wine I'm drunk, in time, I'll chose not to remember But the roses find life in the heat ember I'll be damned if I'm gonna let insecurities Weigh me down, and now to think, I let this reprise One too many times, scars on my back, still I'm bleeding Still I fight the war so deep inside me; still I'm feeding Now I try to rebuild on a foundation of deprave The only Rose I should've gave, is on a grave You tried to work your way in my on sympathetic attitude When in the end, all you did left me messed and screwed Blood on the thorns of all the Red Roses Now a heart, ripped apart, dies and decomposes Causing the affection that lead the Roses to a red Turn the color to a death black instead What else did you expect on Valentines Day Roses always die; they always decay Pandora's Box See that I don't get it! I breathed your lies, and watched the eyes My hands were tied, cant stop demise So sick of your fessing, wish you'd stop messing No snake hissing, my affections im expressing I believed in evolution, not this execution I tried to find a solution to this revolution But what I found just made it worse That's why I live this curse, nursed In this verse! I've have opened Pandora's Box After all the walks... and all the talks Now I've come to see that you're my enemy Beware... I've gone insane I will bleed you from my veins!! Now there's no compromise To what you've done, to what you said Your still the voice inside my head That voice that calls to me in the dead on night The one that says its going to be alright. but I now know that speech to be pseudo salvation All you did was lead me into a sinful temptation Now what I found just made it worse That's why I live this curse, nursed In this verse! I've have opened Pandora's Box After all the walks... and all the talks Now I've come to see that you're my enemy Beware... I've gone insane I will bleed you from my veins!! All this confusion... and this delusion Has lead to me to one conclusion! That you were never there for me You were just there to see me bleed! Upon looking back, now realize That I'm the cause of my demise I reached out my open hand And you have taken me, to this land Now I put up this middle finger To show you, no romance lingers I have opened up Pandora's Box from my own flummox Why couldn't you have seen That I am what I seem Ill add more if you guys so desire Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 06:41 AM	#2
Maserati Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 436 Senior Member	you suck Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 06:43 AM	#3
XU8i6ysK Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 368 Senior Member	Porch, no spamming. >:\| Also, Nexus, I read your stuff on DHQ, very good stuff man. Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 06:45 AM	#4
Prererularl Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 498 Senior Member	DHQ?? I thought I was the only person who went to that anceint place lol. And thanks for the input Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 06:46 AM	#5
ZZChristopher Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 337 Senior Member	Nope lol, I'm Hisagi on there. XD Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 08:14 AM	#6
emingeRek Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 401 Senior Member	Haha, thats kewl bro And thanks for the input. These ones are a little darker then the ones I posted on there, and a little older too lol Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 04:01 PM	#7
ElectraDupu Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 428 Senior Member	It's not horrible just a little to angry for my tastes. Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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08-13-2010, 10:04 PM	#8
pKgGpUlF Join Date Oct 2005 Posts 547 Senior Member	Well I write when im angry, so that where that voices comes from. Thanks though Share Share this post on Digg Del.icio.us Technorati Twitter
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